Newest Clip: soundcloud.com/user-735320952/avelder - Submitted October 1st, posted on October 18th. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Now that the role's been cast in the thread I tried out for, it should be okay to put up my take on the character I auditioned for. I combined all three clips together this time around, so there's only the one ten-second link to go to.
I got some nice feedback from the one that's handling the project, but I'd like some more if possible. Critiquing me would be a big help for me here, both in terms of the delivery and audio quality itself. I was so nervous when it came to that second line because of not being used to trying to combine two emotions like that together. I'm sure you can hear how it's quieter than the other two lines in the clip even after noise reduction and normalizing it to the same -3dB range I did with the other two clips.
I'm going to try for a couple of other projects later this week, but let's see where I can improve before I go rushing into them first.
Post by Ashley Lynn on Aug 15, 2017 8:53:06 GMT 9.5
I listened to it a few times to try to give honest feedback...I think, for me, the second line "This doesn't look like nothing, Scarlet." seemed like you held back a bit (possibly because you were nervous) I could tell you were going for concerned/irritated, but I think there could be more emotion. I definitely got "sickly" for the last one. The first line kind of reminded me of the 'angsty teen' voice from FNAF: Sister Location. Was this for a video game?
Yes. I'm sorry for not linking to it the first time around. Here it is. The character was supposed to be an older teenage boy that was a bit blunt but still caring towards his female friend. I agree with you on the held too much back line for the second one. I've found that one of my biggest struggles is when it comes to raising my voice and retaining emotion so far.
Thanks for the opinion. Working on my confidence behind the mic and just with my voice in general is my main goal right now, so I'm trying to challenge myself here and figure things out as I go!
I agree with what Waitinginadream said, I could hear some wavering in the second line. On top of that, I have two additional notes to add. Next time try taking it a bit slower when you're reading the lines and try adding just a little more emphasis in your speech, especially at the end and the start of your sentences (Instead of going up in, try going down). Nonetheless, good take, hope my feedback helps. ^^;
Yes, your feedback does help. I think I was talking through those lines faster because I was afraid of losing my tone and reverting back into my regular monotone voice. That and delivering believable emotion have been my two biggest hurdles so far. I get over them sometimes, and I crash right to the ground on others... sometimes on different lines in the same audition! That's kind of what happened on line two in this one.
But it gives me an idea of what I can or can't do yet and where I need to improve. Thank you!
When I saw that Arzu Venture thread with everyone posting auditions a few weeks back, I wanted to give it an honest shot. The character I felt okay enough sending in an audition for was an elderly wise man (dog). There are five lines and three takes of each one in this 90 sec. clip. I felt the best about the first take on each line, but that last line tripped me up way too much since the description was the character was always calm yet here he is delivering an emotional statement.
This was the audition where my anxiety behind the mic started to go away a bit as I just wanted to have fun here, but I don't know if the actual result sounds any good. I'd rather embarrass myself by putting my tryout up publicly and asking for feedback.
The Uncertain Man: I almost bricked my old phone while trying to stick a custom rom on it the other day. Don't do that either.
Jan 24, 2018 6:13:09 GMT 9.5
Brittany Ann Phillips: I agree with LadyStardust. A Kaotica Eyeball works really well for those who don't have a booth. It can be expensive but with a little digging you can find discount codes when you fill out their order form (I managed to knock 20% off of mine).
Jan 24, 2018 7:26:55 GMT 9.5
Bean: That's just a bit too far out of my price range at the moment, but thanks for mentioning it, Brittany Ann Phillips. Recording in a car in the garage can be fun at least when the weather's nice. Feels like I'm in my own personal booth out there.
Jan 24, 2018 7:51:50 GMT 9.5
sinclairslick: So I started working on a personal project
Jan 24, 2018 8:49:02 GMT 9.5
sinclairslick: Due to it's nature I'm keeping myself from the project itself but it's a lot of fun to just play with a character I've created
Jan 24, 2018 8:50:43 GMT 9.5
sinclairslick: Anyone else ever start personal projects for practice?
Jan 24, 2018 8:56:39 GMT 9.5
Jose Arias: No. But I always imagine myself, creating characters in my mind.
Jan 24, 2018 9:04:24 GMT 9.5
benedict: Michael, hope the battery didn't kablowie on you! LiPo batteries can be unforgiving.
Jan 24, 2018 9:21:40 GMT 9.5
benedict: sinclairslick, funny you mention that! I'm still trying to get to the point I can write a novel, but I've been doing short stories for a while. My son wants to try his hand (throat) at VA, and I thought it'd be fun to write a short story with...
Jan 24, 2018 9:22:27 GMT 9.5
benedict: two characters and a narrator. Figured that'd be a neat one for the two of us to play with, even if it never sees light of day. (I'd like to get into writing radio plays!)
Jan 24, 2018 9:22:53 GMT 9.5
benedict: Bean, I don't have a garage, but my car's my only booth at the moment. (Only place I can escape my cats, birds, life, etc.) I just can't record when the weather's poopy. Unfortunately a neighbor has started breeding dogs. When his dogs go off, it blows...
Jan 24, 2018 9:23:52 GMT 9.5
benedict: the take. (I wish I had a garage...)
Jan 24, 2018 9:23:58 GMT 9.5
sinclairslick: benedict I've been writing prose since i was in high school so it's fun to take those skills an apply them to something
Jan 24, 2018 9:47:42 GMT 9.5
Jose Arias: I was thinking about writing some stories with my characters. Maybe some you guys can voice for them.
Jan 24, 2018 11:11:19 GMT 9.5